So I was given a some constructive criticism from a beta who's opinion I value greatly. She was not a fan of my original prologue for one of my books. I redid it with the suggestions she gave me. After several drafts, trying out different concepts, I finally had something I thought was acceptable. Unfortunately, I am still in love with my first idea. This is where you come in! Tonight I am posting both prologues for said book. I want to put it to a vote. If you could please read both versions posted below. Then, either leave the coinciding letter in the comments below or on the Facebook post that brought you to this page. You may also leave any comments or critique you may have below. The comments are not published unless I approve them, so if you would rather them not be visible please specify. Here We GO!!!!! A Two years prior I climb into the limousine that the funeral home provides for the grieving fami...
*neck roll* Someone's bout to DIE up in here!! LOL, new year new throw out. I figure if I beat 2016 at its own game, I can keep 2017 from getting out of hand..... I can hope anyway. Here is a little slice of Relentless...and I am going to leave you hanging.. because I can BOOM. Relentless Heart Maggie I am finally coherent enough to understand I am in the emergency room. As the drug they gave me to counteract whatever I was given takes effect, I see the gurneys with Ty and Markus being pushed into the bays across from me. My eyes meet Markus’s as he passes, nostrils flaring with rage. He tries to launch himself off the liter, but is still held down by the restraints for transport. Ty, however, isn’t moving. His head has fallen to the side and bobs lifelessly as the gurney maneuvers the room. I can feel a tear roll down my face when I notice the blue pallor on his beautiful heart shaped lips. I try to drag my eyes away but stop...
It is Sunday..and almost midnight. I just made it. Here is more of S#!t Storm. Storm I stand dumbfounded as Jen skips away like a pixie. That girl could stand in a sauna and still appear cool as a cucumber. I can Feel Jax’s eyes on me, but I know I am as red as a tomato right now. You would think that I would be used to being around him by now, but I am not. It is still amazing to me that such a man would want to be in the presence of a frumpy nobody like me. His cool blue stare meets me as I turn to him, his mouth spread wide in a grin. I can’t resist the returning smile I give him. His face always holds such mischief, like a kid in a candy store. I swear he could turn a nun into a giggling school girl. “She’s kind of a bitch. I like her.” He says, again with that goofy smirk on his face. That is all it takes for the tension and embarrassment to drain from my body. I start to laugh so hard I tear up as he watches me. He must think I am a mess. My mood has...
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