So I was given a some constructive criticism from a beta who's opinion I value greatly. She was not a fan of my original prologue for one of my books. I redid it with the suggestions she gave me. After several drafts, trying out different concepts, I finally had something I thought was acceptable. Unfortunately, I am still in love with my first idea. This is where you come in! Tonight I am posting both prologues for said book. I want to put it to a vote. If you could please read both versions posted below. Then, either leave the coinciding letter in the comments below or on the Facebook post that brought you to this page. You may also leave any comments or critique you may have below. The comments are not published unless I approve them, so if you would rather them not be visible please specify. Here We GO!!!!! A Two years prior I climb into the limousine that the funeral home provides for the grieving fami...
*neck roll* Someone's bout to DIE up in here!! LOL, new year new throw out. I figure if I beat 2016 at its own game, I can keep 2017 from getting out of hand..... I can hope anyway. Here is a little slice of Relentless...and I am going to leave you hanging.. because I can BOOM. Relentless Heart Maggie I am finally coherent enough to understand I am in the emergency room. As the drug they gave me to counteract whatever I was given takes effect, I see the gurneys with Ty and Markus being pushed into the bays across from me. My eyes meet Markus’s as he passes, nostrils flaring with rage. He tries to launch himself off the liter, but is still held down by the restraints for transport. Ty, however, isn’t moving. His head has fallen to the side and bobs lifelessly as the gurney maneuvers the room. I can feel a tear roll down my face when I notice the blue pallor on his beautiful heart shaped lips. I try to drag my eyes away but stop...
A word of advice. Never become a writer. Why? Well, I will tell you. Eventually, you start to believe your own bullshit. Delude yourself into seeing things that aren't there. You are convinced at first that situations are innocent, then your friends say they are not, and you believe them. Just trust your instincts. Fairy tales are just that. Never going to happen. Especially not to me. So I open my mouth, loaded with misconceived information, that I didn't want to believe to begin with, and now I am pretty sure I fucked something up that could have pretty awesome. Ugg, I should be used to this by now, but I guess it never gets easier. I have deleted two posts this week, which I never do. I over stepped, caught up in a moment of irrationality, that I should have been smart enough to avoid. My apologies world, for not being better than my illness. Not this time. -------->BATSHIT
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