Thursday throw out

Welcome,
Another week down, and far closer to having the edits done for muse done. It is amazing how much time it takes to change the tense of an entire Book. Now every time I read other peoples work I find myself picking out the words placed in the improper tense. After the edits are complete I will have one more read through before I release it, AGAIN.

I recently spoke with a former professor of mine that gave me a pep talk. She has never been one to sugar coat, and always gives it to me strait. She raved about my work and explained that sometimes having a good story that is not technically perfect is better than having a technically perfect story with no substance...sooooo that is what I am holding to. Me in my non-professionally edited glory, and a solid story!
ON to the teaser..This week I am bringing you an excerpt from one of my rarely visited projects hope you enjoy!!

The Last Adventure of Those Girls



                There is a fine line between crazy and fun, and my best friends dance that line on toe shoes. It never ceases to amaze me how five girls from an array of backgrounds could come together and work so well. We are those girls. The girls that are friends with everyone, but belong only with each other. We had one of every stereotype. There was the rich beauty queen, the girl from the wrong side of the tracks, the party girl, the smart girl, and the bad ass. One thing is for certain, when we are together, we are a force to reckon with.

                We strut on to the floor of the Bellagio, dressed to the nines. As usual, I stumble in my borrowed heels, unceremoniously plowing into a rather well built pit boss. He steadies me with a hand on my shoulder, and a stern look. I blush and whisper my excuse me, pointing at the obscenely high heels my girlfriends insisted I shove onto my feet. He nods and winks at me, then makes his way to the floor.

                “Were you going sugar? I was just about to introduce myself.” Teagan screams at him as he walks away. I roll my eyes and haul her toward the bar area, she had already downed her entire minibar back in the room. Teagan giggles and wraps herself around me, giving me a sloppy kiss on my cheek. “You sure are a sexy bitch, I would totally go girl on girl with you.” She slurs into my ear, as I roll my eyes.

                “You sure know how to make a girl feel sexy.” I goad, returning the cheek kiss  and squeezing her tightly to my side.

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Well there you go!! hope you enjoy...please like and share. Tell your friends :)

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